{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"19042313","dateCreated":"1263911129","smartDate":"Jan 19, 2010","userCreated":{"username":"elszymczak","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/elszymczak","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1253575789\/elszymczak-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/sutliff.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/19042313"},"dateDigested":1532484520,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Comments","description":"Writing:<br \/>\nThis essay lacked serious elaboration.  I was left wondering why, how, etc. to a lot of your points.  You didn't have a hook, nor did you have a thesis.  Because you didn't have a thesis, you didn't have organization, and therefore, you didn't have elaboration in your essay.  Edit for comma errors and fragments, as well.<br \/>\n<br \/>\nProject:<br \/>\nThe whole point was to discuss how you became an individual, but you didn't hardly do that. You threw some ideas in there, but you didn't explain yourself in a way that developed the prompt.  Your quote was good, but you didn't explain it enough with personal stories\/details.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}